
For as we stood gazing across the bay
truly my breath was snatched away
appearing into this tranquil scene
upon the sea surface was a submarine
yet so like no other craft I’d seen
this was some castle from a dream,
of conning tower, not one but two
to give the Captain all round view
and while these boats are black as night
this one was painted all over white
and while I watched from on the shore
she slipped beneath the waves once more.

Excellent. In all respects. Makes me smile at the unexpected twist you’ve given it. And I can see it, too
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